This is the fourth part of a fiction serial, in 1000 words.
Dreading the arrival of her fussy mother-in-law, Anita rushed around to tidy up. Then she changed the bedclothes in the spare room, did some dusting and hoovering, and finished off with a quick rub around the bath, toilet, and sink. Housework could really wear you out when you were heavily pregnant, she had discovered. Time for a sit down, and a cup of tea. She would get to the rest of the phone calls after a break.
It took a while to realise she had been asleep. A combination of last night and the exertions of the morning had worn her out. On impulse, she walked to the window to see if Mike’s car was outside, already knowing it wouldn’t be. It had been well over four hours since she had spoken to Mike’s parents, and they hadn’t turned up yet. She called Claudia’s mobile, hoping for the opportunity for a chat before the fearsome Dorothy arrived. It went to answerphone, and she decided not to leave a message. Claude lived almost one hundred and eighty miles away now, and she didn’t want to get her in a panic about Mike.
Anita thought she should tell her Mum, and Jill too. It was unlikely they would have heard from Mike, but she should at least let them know. Mum’s phone went to answerphone, so she left a message. Same with Jill, who was probably still at work, and unable to answer. Hunger kicked in, and she made herself a sandwich after checking the meal she had prepared last night. It would be useful to serve to her in-laws later. She could spread it to three people easily, with some extra vegetables.
When the house phone rang, she presumed it would be Dotty, explaining why they were late. But it was the police. “Mrs Hollis? This is Jane Dawes here. I am a detective working in the missing persons department, and I would like to come and take some more details about Mike. Would six tonight be too late?” Anita didn’t want to put her off. “That’s fine. My in-laws might be here though. Just so you know, they haven’t heard from Mike either”. She waited as the policewoman typed on a keyboard. “Very well, Mrs Hollis, I will see you at six”.
By five-thirty, there was still no sign of Dotty and Jim. Anita started to hope that they had changed their minds about coming, but knew she should phone them to check. Their house phone went to answerphone, so she tried Dotty’s mobile, knowing Jim would be driving. The number was unobtainable, with no tone or message, just a short beep, then nothing. Dotty had probably forgotten to charge it, or top up her pay as you go credit. Mike was always teasing her about that.
Ten minutes later, Mum rang back on the mobile. “Sorry darling, I was at the gym. I had a gym-date, something new for the over sixties. A very nice man, and much younger than me too. He must have been impressed, as he asked me out for dinner this evening. I had to rush to the shops to find a nice new dress to wear”. Anita explained what was happening. Mike’s disappearance, the police involved, and Dotty and Jim on their way too. She knew her Mum couldn’t stand Dotty, and was not at all surprised by her response.
“I’m sure Mike will be in touch soon. It must be a work thing. He’s such a good man, so reliable. It won’t be anything bad, I’m sure. And at least you will have his parents there to look after you. I will call you in the morning and see what’s going on. I’ll be able to tell you all about my hot date”. Anita hung up, and shook her head in resignation. Mum hadn’t really listened to what she had told her. She had never been an affectionate mother, and the girls had grown up doing what they were told, soon realising that Mum was not only selfish, but didn’t seem to like Dad very much either. When he died unexpectedly from a brain haemorrhage, she had seemed completely relieved to be shot of him.
Detective Sergeant Dawes had been in the police for all of her working life. She was worn out, and felt tired all the time. The job had cost her two marriages, and then her only daughter had committed suicide whilst at university. That had almost broken her, and she took a lot of time off, before attending counselling. Her old boss had suggested a transfer from the Crime Squad to Missing Persons. A small department, regular hours, and less stress. She could do her last years there, and then take her pension. Sitting outside the neat-looking house with its well-painted exterior, gravel forecourt, and extension over the garage, she tried to imagine the people who lived there, and get some sort of feeling about them before she went inside.
Before leaving the police station, she had received some information about Michael Hollis. Also his car details, work address, and the fact that he had no criminal record. He had never even had so much as an unpaid parking ticket. As they said in the police, he was of ‘no interest’. She rang the doorbell at exactly six.
Anita opened the door with a stressed look on her face. She could feel the tightness around her jaw, and had a strange tingling sensation in her belly. “Come in, detective. Have you heard anything? Have you found Mike? Would you like a cup of tea? Maybe you prefer coffee?” She was babbling, and she knew it, but couldn’t stop herself. Jane smiled at her. “I’m fine, Mrs Hollis. Please call me Jane. Let’s just sit down and go through a few details, shall we?”
Looking across at the pregnant woman, Jane chose her words carefully.
“There has been some progress, and I have something to tell you”.
Maybe thereβs hope here, but Iβm feeling uneasy. What a horrible mother and mother-in-law.
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Not all mothers are as nice as you, Jennie. π
Best wishes, Pete.
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Awww…π Best to you, Pete.
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Mike ” is such a good man; so reliable”
Hehe. We shall see!
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Really nice work Pete. Best from Florida.
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Thanks, Frank. Glad you’re enjoying it.
Best wishes, Pete.
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In this episode, I thought there were innovations. You are very much on torture, Pete! π Michael
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There is a lot going on in this early part of the story, so I cannot give away too much each day. π
Best wishes, Pete.
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Excellent job, Pete. I find it concerning that the in-laws haven’t appeared yet. I’m anxious to hear the police officer’s update.
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Thanks very much, Pete.
I’m really pleased you are enjoying it.
Best wishes, Pete.
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A cliffhanger! How dare you?! πππ Amazing chapter by thr way. It looks like we will be seeing things from Jane’s POV too
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Different POVs will appear, Sam. And there will be cliffhangers most days, I’m afraid. π
Best wishes, Pete.
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Looking forward!
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Sigh…. left hanging again.
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In these long serials, you have to be left hanging, Lisa. π
Best wishes, Pete.
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What? No! π
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Now I’m glad I couldn’t get here until now – I won’t have as long to wait for the detective’s updates.
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Thanks, GP. All revealed tomorrow. (Well, not all, just what she knows so far. π )
Best wishes, Pete.
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Reblogged this on anita dawes and jaye marie.
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Much appreciated! I left a comment. π
Best wishes, Pete.
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You are such a tease, Pete… and I love it!
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The majority of the names in this serial are those of fellow bloggers. Just slight changes, in a few cases.
Glad you liked the ending!. π
Best wishes, Pete.
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A terrific chapter Pete and what a tease – bravo!
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Thanks, John. I am honing my ‘teasing skills’ with this one. π
Best wishes, Pete.
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You are really good at hooking the reader, Pete!!
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I try hard, Sue. That’s the thing with a serial. It always hangs on the last line of an episode. π
Best wishes, Pete.
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But not everyone succeeds…..
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(1) Anita once complained, “Dam hoovering!” To which Michael replied, “Cry me a river!” (But the names are purely coincidental, as the couple in question lives in Boulder City, Nevada.)
(2) Cleaning the bath, toilet, and sink is no big deal unless you’re pregnant. Therein lies the rub.
(3) The Bible claims that Mary didn’t mind housework because she was heavenly pregnant.
(4) Just because your hunger kicks in, or your baby kicks in the womb, doesn’t mean you’re getting a kick out of life.
(5) Mike always did his best to be back home by six. I suspect that’s because he didn’t want to miss the six o’clock news.
(6) βVery well, Mrs Hollis, I will see you at sixβ. Sure, go ahead and arrive exactly on time. Rub it in, Jane!
(7) “I had a gym-date, something new for the over sixties. A very nice man, and much younger than me too.” So if this man is much younger than Anita’s mum, but goes to the over sixties gym, how old is Anita’s mum? Perhaps she’ll soon be about six feet under?
(8) Jane Dawes and Anita Hollis have a number of things in common. Six degrees of separation?
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In this serial, I am using some real names of fellow bloggers. I am mixing up the first/surnames in some cases, and using full names in others. You may well start to recognise some names from those who regularly comment. π
We call vacuuming ‘hoovering’ here, because Hoover was one of the first brands available. But you had some fun with that, as I guessed you might.
Anita’s mum is 65. Her new boyfriend is only 60. In her eyes, that is ‘much younger’. π
The appointment at six was intentionally coincidental. You spotted it, as I knew you would.
Thanks, David.
Best wishes, Pete.
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Ok, todays theory. He is secretly gay and has met someone online, phoning in sick to cover for a day of how’s your father it turns out the bloke he met goes in heavy with the GHB and this has left Mike with complete memory loss of events and who he is.
Na, but I know how you are sometimes influenced by events in the news π
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I thought you had cracked it by part four, Eduardo.
But of course you hadn’t. π
(I might change the plot to that now, just to confuse you!)
Best wishes, Pete.
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A local gravedigger who also writes ghost stories once told me he was guilty of some plot changes.
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Unstoppable! π
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Oh FFS!!!
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That’s the kind of reaction that makes it all worthwhile. π
Best wishes, Pete.
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Wait. What? Nooo! You are a mean, mean person Pete!π±
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Little old me? π
Best wishes, Pete.
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πΎ Alien abduction? All these non-functioning phones! And who are Claudia and Claude? I’m going to have to read from the start again! Or maybe this is all a dream… π
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Claudia is Anita’s best friend. She calls her ‘Claude’ as a nickname.
Stay alert, Jude! π π
Best wishes, Pete. x
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Cheeky!
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I think we have know each other long enough to allow some cheekiness, Sue. π
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But of course!ππ
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Oh heck! Itβs a bit nippy on this cliff. Roll on tomorrow!
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Thanks, Lorraine. It is my duty to leave you hanging! π
Best wishes, Pete.
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Lol. Hope it doesnβt snow!
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Pete, what a way to leave it AGAIN!! How can I be expected to wait until tomorrow? You best post early doors! :p
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That’s the thing about serials, MBB. You have to leave the reader wanting to know more! π
Best wishes, Pete.
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I’m going to have to stop reading them until you post the finished/complete story hehe π
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Cheater! π π
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A good old-fashioned cliffhanger. Let’s see what happens!
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Thanks, Cindy. A long way to go yet.
(I like ‘old-fashioned’, because I am. π )
Best wishes, Pete. x
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I am so eager to find out whatβs gonna happen nextπ³
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Glad to hear it, Richa.
And check out the names of some of the characters in later episodes! π
Best wishes, Pete.
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Don’t stop there! Hurry up tomorrow!!
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Thanks, Ami. Sorry you have to wait so long to find out more. π
Best wishes, Pete.
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You’re totally not sorry π
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Guilty as charged! π
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