This is a short story in, 1025 words.
It was prompted by the above photo, the third one sent to me by Jennie Fitzkee.
https://jenniefitzkee.com/
Mister Dolman was a good teacher, everyone agreed on that. He could make his lessons come to life by pretending to be a brave knight in armour, or a hedgehog snuffling for food. He would bring things in to show the kids, anything from a funny-shaped rock he had found, to the medals his Dad had been given during the war. Not for him just the dry text of the curriculum books, oh no. In Mister Dolman’s class, the kids actually turned up excited to be there, wondering what would happen next.
And he included everyone. No kid was allowed to sit things out because they were shy, or if they had doubts about their own abilities or skills. Inclusion was his creed, and that applied to Kevin too. A quiet boy, who always seemed to be worrying about something, Kevin didn’t play with the others at break, and nobody willingly sat next to him. Of course, that didn’t go unnoticed by the dedicated teacher.
So one day, Mister Dolman brought in a huge box from home. It was full of all sorts of random objects. He invited the kids to stand around and look in the box, then asked them what they thought was in it. Melody smiled. “Just junk”. Danny actually laughed. “You brought your garbage into school, Mister Dolman”. Letitia put her hands on her hips. “That’s boring”. He called Kevin forward. “Here, Kevin. You look, and tell me what you see”.
The boy stared into the box for a long time. He looked at the cardboard tubes from old toilet rolls and kitchen paper, the parcel box, some wires, and old paints and brushes. There were a few empty plastic bottles, washed out and clean, and two food storage tubs that had seen better days. The other kids shuffled their feet, as Kevin thought about those objects. Finally, he looked up at the teacher. “I see a castle”.
Smiling, Mister Dolman nodded. “That’s great, Kevin. Okay class, after lunch, we are all going to make a castle. Kevin is going to show us how”.
Using an old cupboard door as a base, and glue provided by the school, they set about creating that castle, guided by Kevin, who could undoubtedly picture it in his head. The cardboard rolls became strong towers, the bottles were carefully cut to become crenelated bastions, and the parcel box turned into a gatehouse and drawbridge, with the old wires used to raise and lower it. The storage tubs were cut and stuck in place to provide walls between the towers. By the time the end of the school day was approaching, everyone agreed it looked just like one of the castles they had seen in old pictures.
As they were getting ready to go home, Mister Dolman lifted the castle, and put it in a safe place on top of the bookshelf. “Safe journey home now, everyone. Tomorrow afternoon, we are going to paint the castle”. He smiled as he watched Melody and Danny walking with Kevin. They were all chatting and grinning. Everyone wanted to know more about how Kevin had thought up the castle.
True to his word, the paints were brought out the next day. The other kids were asking Kevin things. “What colour should I paint this, Kevin?”. “Shall I paint the drawbridge brown, like wood, Kevin?” After it was almost finished, Kevin took the thinnest brush, and drew lines up and down the castle, making it look like the various stone sections would have appeared. Mister Dolman gave him a piece of strong card, and asked him to name the castle. “We will put the card in front on the base, Kevin”. The boy took a marker pen, and wrote carefully.
‘Kevins Karsull’.
It was easy enough to persuade the head teacher to let him put the castle in the trophy cabinet in the entrance hall. Then every day for the rest of his time at that school, Kevin would walk past something he had created, and the other kids would say “We helped too”.
Retirement was compulsory, but that didn’t mean Mister Dolman was looking forward to it. His wife was worried about him. “Maybe you can still do something, Phil? You know, voluntary stuff. Teaching slow readers, helping out at the museum. You’ll find something, I’m sure”. The retirement party was after school on the Friday. They gave him gifts of framed photos of the school, and a lovely collage made by his last class. Everyone signed his card, and wished him well.
When he walked across to his car, Phil Dolman didn’t look back, not even once. He didn’t want them to see him crying.
The following Monday, it already felt strange to not have to go to work. He sat around reading the papers, and watched the breakfast news on television. Just after nine, there was a knock at the door. The parcel was really big, and at first he thought it must be for his wife. But the parcel guy made him sign for it in the name of Mister Dolman, and he was intrigued as he opened it carefully, noting the large FRAGILE stickers all over it.
Inside, there were acres of bubble wrap, and once he was through those, he revealed a beautiful castle made from plaster,Β lovingly crafted and painted. There was also a note.
‘Mister Dolman, I’m sorry I couldn’t make it to your party. I live a long way from that town now, and I was busy with work. I phoned the school and explained, and they were kind enough to give me your address. I have never forgotten the day we made that castle, and I wanted you to have your own one, so you could remember how you helped me back then. I hope you like it. Kevin.
There was another card inside, with careful writing on it. It simply read
‘Kevins Karsull’.
Phil showed it to his wife, his eyes wet with tears.
They both agreed it was the best retirement present any teacher could ever wish for.
What a heartwarming story, sheer perfection!
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Thanks very much for such a lovely comment, Liz. I am so pleased you liked it that much. π
Best wishes, Pete.
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What an absolutely beautiful story! I loved this, even though I am now wiping my eyes. Thank you, and thanks to Jenny for pointing me in this direction.
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Thanks for your kind words, Jill. I am very happy to see you here. I hope that you find other posts to enjoy.
Best wishes, Pete.
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Wonderful story Pete… heartwarming and needs a tissue alert….x
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Thanks, Sally, that’s very kind.
Best wishes, Pete.
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Nicely done Pete π
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Cheers mate. I am still struggling with ‘children’ in stories, so trying to include them more.
Best wishes, Pete.
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A touching story. As I finally let it be known I was retiring after 35 years of teaching kids from the upper grades keep coming by and giving hugs and well wishes. I do miss the kids. I do not miss the pressure.
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I can imagine it is very stressful, teaching older children. At one time, I had a notion to become a History teacher, but I was dissuaded by the thought of having to stick to a tight curriculum, which was often dull and boring.
Best wishes, Pete.
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So touching Pete! Loved it! π
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Thanks, Susanne. I am trying harder with ‘children’ these days.
Best wishes, Pete.
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A beautiful love story, Pete… Love is what it’s all about! β€ Thanks so much for sharing it with us.
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Thanks for those kind words, Bette.
Best wishes, Pete.
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My eyes are wet with tears, too, Pete. A lovely story.
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Thanks, Mary. It seems I hit a few tear ducts with this story. I am taking that as a much appreciated compliment.
Best wishes, Pete.
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You should.
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When word got out that I was going to retire my last year of teaching, the things that meant the most to me were the old students who came by to thank me for being their teacher. Your story brought back those wonderful memories, Pete.
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Thanks, Pete. I kept in touch with four of the teachers from my last school. One of them is still alive, in his late 80s. Two of them became genuine long-term friends, who I saw socially. One came to my wedding in 2009, a few years before he died.
Best wishes, Pete.
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This is a great counterbalance to the story of the naughty little boy and the bird. Here what I especially enjoyed is that Kevin saw beauty where the other kids saw only junk.
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Thanks, Elizabeth. Yes, Kevin saw potential, just as the teacher saw it in him. π
Best wishes, Pete.
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Terrific story Pete!
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Thanks, John. I am trying my best to write better when it comes to children.
Best wishes, Pete.
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What a sweet story. I remember when our class bought our teacher a leaving present. He went into the storeroom and shut the door for a while!
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I don’t think we ever bought a teacher a leaving present. But I once gave a lady teacher a Valentine’s Day card. π (I was so polite, I signed it…)
Best wishes, Pete.
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(1) In the beginning, Kevin seemed rather spacey, which no doubt alienated him from the other kids. So I’m surprised he didn’t say, after exploring the contents of the box, “I see a space colony on LV-426.”
(2) Dolman would be a dull man if teaching were all work and no play.
(3) Phil Dolman needs to go on a diet. He’s gained a few stones by just sitting around reading e-books by M.T. Cromlach.
(4) When it comes to chess, Kevin is a rookie player who loves to castle.
(5) C’mon, give me a break! Who puts FRAGILE stickers all over a parcel?
(6) “Inside, there were acres of bubble wrap…” Acres? I’m trying to wrap my head around that!
(7) Kevin is a plasterer in Newcastle.
(8) Space stations are castles in the sky, and yet they aren’t.
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I thought you might use a Spacey line, (I expected Se7en) but you lost me completely with number 3. π
Best wishes, Pete.
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(3) Phil Dolman needs to go on a diet. Heβs gained a few stones by just sitting around reading e-books by M.T. Cromlach.
Phil (Fill) β M.T. (empty)
Dolman spelled with an “e” is Dolmen, a Ο-shaped table of stones.
Cromlach spelled with an “e” is Cromlech, which is another word for dolmen.
I fixed the lack of an “e” by putting it in the e-book.
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I wouldn’t have worked that out in a million years! π
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This is such a beautiful story and touched my heart so much!
I loved it and cried( good tears)
You have such a gift at writing!
BTW my mom was a teacher, I was a teacher and my sister that passed away was also a teacher. π
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Good to hear that teaching ran in your family. I was never a teacher, but I benefited from having some good ones. And Jennie is a wonderfully inspirational teacher of young children, in her home state in New England.
Thanks, Margie.
Best wishes, Pete. x
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We all have one of those teachers we really should have thanked along the way.
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I had some in secondary school (High School) that I stayed friends with until they died. But my junior school teachers were mostly quite severe. π
Best wishes, Pete.
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This is a beautiful tale, Pete. A good teacher really can change a child’s life β€
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They certainly can. π
Thanks, Jacquie.
Best wishes, Pete.
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You’re going soft Pete, another tear-jerker πͺ
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Thanks, Jude. I like to think I am revealing my ‘sensitive side’.
I was surprised to discover I actually had one! π
Best wishes, Pete. x
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“Mister Dolman was a good teacher.” For anyone who has been a teacher, you could have said: “Mister Dolman was a teacher.” There are two kinds of people holding class, teachers and people with jobs.
Warmest regards, Theo
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I knew some of those ‘job people’ posing as teachers, Theo. π
Best wishes, Pete.
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Very nice. Cheers, Jon.
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Thanks, Jon. When it comes to school kids, I have to try harder. π
Best wishes, Pete.
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Reblogged this on A Teacher's Reflections and commented:
You may want to have a tissue ready when you read Pete’s wonderful photo prompt story of a castle, a teacher and a student. A teacher can make a tremendous difference in the life of a child.
The real toy castle in this photo holds a similar story, yet the roles were reversed. Wesley was captivated playing with this castle in my classroom. When it was put away in order to play with other toys, he was upset and asked for the castle. One day he had a temper tantrum in front of his mother, asking her to buy him the castle. Of course she did not.
Many years later the castle was stored in the attic at school, torn and somewhat broken. When we did a major attic clean-out a few years ago, the castle was ready for the dump. I confiscated it, with many fond memories of Wesley. I had just been invited to his Eagle Scout induction ceremony – the castle would be a perfect gift.
And, it was! Wesley said, “I remember that castle! You saved it for me?” Yes, I did. We both cried.
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Lovely back-story, Jennie. Many thanks for reblogging. π
Best wishes, Pete.
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My pleasure, Pete. Glad you liked the true story.
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I’ve only reblogged a couple of things in the year I’ve been bogging, Jennie. Wesley’s story was one of them.
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I remember, Pete. Thank you again. It was a wonderful moment in teaching. I was struck by the fact that Peteβs story, based only on a random photo, was similar- with a teacher and a student. That was wonderful.
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A wonderful story. Thanks!
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Thanks, Darlene. More of my ‘softer side’ again. π
Best wishes, Pete.
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Well, you made my cry with that story! How touching!! I must tell you the true story of the castle is similar, but in reverse. Thanks so much! You are such a good writer. Best to you, Pete.
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Thanks very much, Jennie. I am glad I managed to capture the spirit of the actual event.
Best wishes, Pete.
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Youβll read about it when I reblog. π Best to you, Pete.
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Well, it took me a few moments to stop crying Pete. But now I can comment. This is what every dedicated teacher and librarian wants is to know theyβve had a lasting positive impact on their young charges. What an absolutely beautiful story to go with Jennieβs whimsical photo. It reminds me of the story you wrote for me.π€
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Thanks very much, Kim. I did love that story I wrote for you, and it’s good to read that the real story behind Jennie’s photo is not unlike my fiction. π
Best wishes, Pete.
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Well said, Kim!
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Wish I’d read that before I applied mascara.
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Ah, if it made you teary, then my work is done! π
Thanks, FR.
Best wishes, Pete.
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Fortunately for me I didnβt have mascara on. I cried big tears, too.
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Fab, I loved this heartwarming story, Pete
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Thanks, Sue. I must be in a good mood today. π π
Best wishes, Pete.
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Beautiful story
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Thanks very much. I am so glad you enjoyed it.
Best wishes, Pete.
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My pleasure
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