This is the final part of a fiction serial, in 750 words.
So off I went to Broadmoor, a maximum security prison hospital in Berkshire. Home of the crazies who are too dangerous to be around normal prisoners. I wasn’t unduly concerned of course, as I was not remotely mad. In fact, I was going to be better off there than in a mainstream prison. Maria’s husband may have had a long reach in the prison system, but he was not going to be able to engineer my killing in that place.
Once I got used to the smell, the food, and the occasional unspeakable madman who had to be avoided at all costs, it wasn’t so bad. I had a proper room on my own, with an en-suite bathroom. I was lucky to be in the refurbished wing of the Gothic monstrosity, the oldest intsitution of its kind still used by the Prison Service.
There was routine of course. Regular interviews with the doctor assigned to me, activities that were more or less compulsory unless you were disruptive. And they probably drugged my food, as I was fairly tired all the time, and surprisingly calm. In that place, seven murders were nothing much to shout about. It housed some of the worst sickos and weirdos imaginable.
To try to keep my mind active, I signed up for Art Therapy. I had been hopeless at Art when I was at school, but now I had unlimited time on my hands, I might as well give it a try.
From the first lesson, I hated the tutor. She was a civilian who was paid to come in and teach the nutters how daubing some paint about would make them nicer people, and hopefully inspire them to recant their wicked ways. To keep her safe, two attendants were present in the class at all times, not that the medicated zombies who sat painting were likely to do her any harm.
She called me Daniel. I asked her to call me Danny. I gave her that chance. But she kept calling me Daniel even after that. And she had a stupid name too. Rosalinda. Who calls their kid a name like that? Her parents must have been avid readers of romantic fiction set in the eighteenth century. And she took the piss out of my work, though she called it constructive criticism. Her most used phrase was “No, no, no”, whenever she looked at my work in progress. Then she would shake her head and smile at me like I was six years old.
One day as she started to head over to me to look at my idea of ‘the perfect view’, I quietly snapped off the end of my paintbrush. If she was about to come out with her catchphrase, I will never know. As she leaned over me, I stabbed her in the neck with the sharp end of the brush. I got in eight good thrusts before the two attendants wrestled me to the ground and sounded the alarm.
Despite some trained nurses and a doctor being rushed to the Art Room, Rosalinda didn’t make it.
Shame about that.
I expected the padded cell, or whatever they used at the time. But they transferred me to Rampton instead.
The trial was by video link. I stayed silent, and was found guilty of course. When you are already in Broadmoor for seven murders and then kill someone else, the trial is not the same as it is outside. Like I cared, either way.
Rampton was so much nicer. More modern, and great facilities. I was a marked man though, often in restraints when moved around, and always on my own for the first few months. The guards were obviousy wary of me, and that was fine by me.
A few years went by. To be honest, I lost track of time.
There was a visitor. He was a writer, and he was keen to tell my story.
“People are interested, Danny. They want to know about you. I have a book deal in place if you cooperate”.
He called me Danny. So I agreed. I told him my story, and he wrote it up as you are reading it now. I got a copy in the post, a hardback. Not as thick as I would have liked, but there you go.
Maybe you understand me, maybe not. I don’t really care.
But if I ever get out of here, and you happen to run across me somewhere, always remember one thing.
Call me Danny.
The End.
Well bloody hell. I’ve binged-read this since last night as you probably saw from all of my notifications lol! In a way, I do feel sorry for him because nobody knew what he went through as a child but he needed to face the consequences of his actions. I’m currently sitting here wide-eyed and eyebrows raised in shock from all the events in this serial. You really are a tremendous writer, Pate 🙂
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Thanks, Ami. Most readers expected him to get away with it all, but I thought justice had to be done.
Best wishes, Pete.
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Thank you so much, Pete! What a very intriguing and captivating serial. I never had thought he will be caught. Best wishes, Michael
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I deliberately led readers to believe he was not going to get caught. But justice had to be done! 🙂
Best wishes, Pete.
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🙂 xx Michael
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I really liked the ending! Somehow it felt satisfying for Danny to have one more murder and then a published book. Well done, Pete!
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Thanks, Jennie. I loved how everyone was on Danny’s side, despite his terrible crimes. 🙂
Best wishes, Pete.
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See what the power of good writing can do? Best to you, Pete.
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Absolutely fabulous ending Pete, I thoroughly enjoyed this series, I hope that doesn’t reflect badly on my character? You should publish your serials, small vignettes, you could sell them as a package? Can’t wait for the next one…hugs, C
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Glad you liked the ending, Cheryl. The new serial starts on Friday.
Best wishes, Pete.x
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Ah, I got quite fond of Danny. I hope he enjoys the rest of his life! Lots of people to kill with minimal consequences! 🙂 Loved this story up there along with the doll one, still my favourite..
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Thanks, Lucinda. ‘Little Annie’ (the possessed doll) is also one of my favourites. It was very complex to write, and very rewarding to get it right.
Best wishes, Pete.
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Quite chilling and interesting that Danny thought himself “normal”…I’ll be sure to take note and make sure I call everyone by their preferred name…Tweeted for you Pete x
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Thanks, Carol. The worst ones always think they are normal, and so does everyone else around them. Until they get caught. 🙂
Best wishes, Pete. x
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Danny picked the best writer to tell his tale. You took a good story and spun it expertly in ways I don’t understand or I would steal your technique. Mesmerizing! I can imagine you take a great deal of satisfaction in the completion of your serials.
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Thanks very much, Geoff. In those serials that have a ‘circular’ reveal of events leading to the conclusion, it is very satisfying when they work out to the satisfaction of the readers.
Best wishes, Pete.
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Good work, Pete. It’s been a while since I stayed with you throughout one of your serials. That’s not a comment on your excellent writing—it’s more a reflection that I usually don’t have the time to make that daily commitment.
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I appreciate you sticking with it, Pete. Glad you enjoyed it.
Best wishes, Pete.
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I don’t know why I felt such a surge of delight when I could see another murder coming–but I did! A great story all the way around. I agree that it would make an excellent movie.
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Thanks, Liz. When readers gleefully anticipate the next murder, I get the feeling I am doing something right. 🙂
Best wishes, Pete.
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“Gleeful” was exactly how I felt!
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Terrific ending Pete…fascinating story inside the mind of a mass murderer who exemplifies the “but he seemed so normal” comments when someone is told about one!
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Thanks very much, John. That is exactly what I hoped to achieve.
Best wishes, Pete.
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Enjoyed this one, Pete. I liked the way you circled back. Good use of the literary device.
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Thanks very much, Pam. I have done that in other serials, but it worked well for this story.
Best wishes, Pete.
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i will definitely call him Danny if I ever run into him. Good job.
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Thanks, Molly. I do appreciate you sticking with it.
Best wishes, Pete.
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(1) Danny flew over the cuckoo’s nest.
(2) Did any of the normal prisoners look like Patrick McGoohan?
(3) The wing of the Gothic monstrosity merely trembled when the roof of Notre-Dame de Paris collapsed. It was just another imperturbable gargoyle…
(4) “Rosalinda…took the piss out of my work.” Note to Danny: She just wanted you to use the yellow paint!
(5) “One day as she started to head over to me to look at my idea of ‘the perfect view’…” Danny’s work was entitled “A View to a Kill.”
(6a) Rosalinda had previously had a brush with death, but it was Danny who finally dispatched her.
(6b) Danny looked down at Rosalnda on the floor and said, “Thou art no, no, no more!”
(7) “There was a visitor. He was a writer, and he was keen to tell my story.” Was the writer’s name Pete Johnson?
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Yes, I was that writer! Good to see a film reference, even if it was a James Bond film. 🙂
Thanks for all your comments, and for staying to the end, David.
Best wishes, Pete.
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Absolutely gripping story. I looked forward to every post . I read most of them them in one day-then could not wait for the last few. Well done-and I think rolykemp might be on to something. best always, Michele
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Thanks, Michele. Roland is one of my oldest friends. He was probably being kind.
Best wishes, Pete. x
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A very enjoyable read, Pete. Well done.
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Thanks very much, Jeanne. I appreciate you reading all of it.
Best wishes, Pete.
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Excellent serial, Pete.
Ah, people always call you Pete? Or has some ever called you Peter?
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Only my mum, my cousin Sue, and my aunt. Everyone else knows to call me Pete! 🙂
Thanks, Don.
Best wishes, Pete.
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Well certainly he likes to be called Danny amazing series Pete I liked it
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Thanks for reading, and for all your comments. There will be a new serial soon.
Best wishes, Pete.
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This was such a wholesome story, thoroughly enjoyed it!
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Thanks, Devangi. I appreciate you sticking with it.
Best wishes, Pete.
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Great ending. I knew there would be something dramatic but hadn’t foreseen another murder! It’s scary to know that there are people like that, without emotion or conscience.
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Those prison hospitals are full of them, unfortunately.
Best wishes, Pete.
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I’ll call him Danny for sure, lol! Good story, Pete.
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Thanks, Stevie. Another one I really enjoyed writing.
Best wishes, Pete.
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Quite a read! Chilling but eminently entertaining.
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Thanks for those kind words, Xander. Given the subject matter, I think ‘chilling’ is good. 🙂
Best wishes, Pete.
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Great story Pete!
The ending was excellent!
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Thanks very much, Nadine. Glad you enjoyed it.
Best wishes, Pete.
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It was an excellently written story! I read the entire thing!
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🙂
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Well, well, well. Looks like Danny boy is set for a cushy future, unless someone calls him Daniel. Good one Pete, though a cot death and a teenage hanging were a bit hard to read.
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One of my darker serials, undoubtedly.
Thanks, Jude.
Best wishes, Pete. x
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Does Julie read your serials?
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No, she has no interest in my blog whatsoever. She’s too busy with Facebook. 🙂
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Haha.. Probably just as well. 😂
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A most excellent read, I do love your serial killers!
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Thanks, FR. No murders at all in the next serial! 🙂
Best wishes, Pete.
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Yes I saw. Well I suppose we can’t have them every time.
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Excellent! That’s been a very enjoyable and insightful read. Cheers, Jon.
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Thanks very much, Jon. Glad you thought so.
Best wishes, Pete.
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remember one thing.
Call me Danny.
Perfect ending, Pete 👍👍👍👍👍
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Thanks very much, Chris. Glad you liked it.
Best wishes, Pete.
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perfect ending to this saga.
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Thanks, Beth. This was the first episode I wrote as a draft. It was good to complete the circle.
Best wishes, Pete.
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yes, I loved your circular style
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Murder mysteries are not my first choice but you do have a gift in story telling Pete, and that’s a fact. Bravo!
Cheers,
CT
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Thanks, Chris. My next serial has no murders in it! 🙂
Best wishes, Pete.
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😦
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And so his games have ended…or have they?
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As far as this story is concerned, Sue. 🙂
Best wishes, Pete.
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Perfect ending Pete, I really enjoyed this one, although I have yet to read a bad one 🙂
It does make you wonder why we treat nutcases so well though? I’m sure there must be a reason
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Probably to stop them killing the staff mate. 🙂
Best wishes, Pete.
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Yes but I have a limited budget, could we shoot on an iPhone? Actually that might work really well . .
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It has been done very successfully.
https://www.indiewire.com/2018/03/movies-shot-on-iphones-unsane-tangerine-shorts-1201941565/
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Indeed but I wonder how they manage the sound which I reckon is harder to record than images . . ? Have you found background music in movies lately overwhelms the dialogue?
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Music, and ‘real-life’ sound both seem to be taking precedence over dialogue these days, especially on TV.
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Have you signed away the film rights yet?
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Is that a firm offer, Ro? 🙂
Cheers, Pete. x
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